Why, hello again
Well, I guess this wasn't MEANT to be terribly melodic, so I won't waste time talking about how weird that aspect was...
rather, I'll say, that it was awful repetetive and your bass sounds pretty bad once it drops below a certain frequency.
Other than that all I can do is shrug and look on in confusion.
Hah, fair enough. I was going for weird. :)
A bit repetitive near the start
The arps at the beginning were really cool, but the structure was pretty repetitive for about 40 seconds. Before you say "Durr, silly, it's trance" hear me out. At fourteen seconds in, a 4 by 4 kick drops in and adds some much needed depth. Then it leaves! And we're left listening to the same thing we just heard!
The track more than makes up for it with what comes next though. The percussion is awesome and dirty, and adds a ton to the mood.
The transition around 1:22 could stand to be a bit smoother, but that's a minor detail. I like that the progression doesn't change but the new instrument keeps it fresh, and that's a nice touch. The familiar percussion which drops back in (slower paced this time) was a good idea as well.
At about 2:19 you come back with your lead and drums after a quick breakdown of tension. I think you could do a LOT more dynamically at this point. It doesn't feel like a very big crescendo; more like we're just listening to what we did before. Maybe something more dramatic in the mid-to-low ranges that we'd never heard before would help accentuate that difference.
Overall, a great industrial track with trance influences.
Wow, thanks for the incredibly helpful review!
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You're leaving!
Well, have a farewell 10/10 and 5/5! The arps and piano are awesome! The pads sound really great to playing harmony around 40 seconds.
Second half is very good
The first 32 seconds were such a snooze that I almost rated you 2 and left. However, it really sounds good after that point. It's surprising; you gave NO indication of the quality of the whole song and I'm sure that some people will zero-bomb you without getting that far in the song.
My only other problem is that it's much too short (less than a minute because the first 32 seconds don't count) and the ending is totally abrupt.
Haha, thanks. The first 32 are sortakinda buildup. I have the bassline coming out first to add some difference to the song, as opposed to a lot of other songs like this, but I have been considering adding a new synth. Thanks man, I appreciate that. The fact that you gave me a good, thorough review means I can fix up my song :D
Edit: 7:11 @12/27/09, I'm exporting a new version.
Put more thought into the mastering
Try loading the MP3 into Audacity and you see that it's peaking throughout and never really stops. What I'm saying is that there isn't much dynamic range at all. It feels like you used a hard limiter on the master output, and that means that the volume of all the sounds is mushed together to fill up the db meter, and that doesn't make for a very pleasant listening experience.
Try remastering it and submitting it again.
Also, I don't like how the melody is carried by one instrument, and the steel drum gets pretty annoying after a while of playing that same note.
Thanks for the review! Thank you for your wise advice. I appreciate, someone saying what they dislike about the song. However, there was no limiter on the master output. Also, this was my first time messing around with the peak and what-not so I am liable to make some mistakes. Thanks again!
~IceMasterDlux ><>
I just have to say...
It's spelled "annihilation."
Sorry bout the typo. I'll fix it right away.
This needs a lot more work
Honestly you should put more thought into a submission before submitting it to the portal. The drum samples sounded pretty bad, and so did the guitar and bass, and, uh, that's pretty much everything.
For a moment I thought this was your first song
I would recommend not using presets on popular VSTs- people recognize them right of the bat.
You used "Criminal Genius" (or something) from Toxic Biohazard, and if I'm not mistaken, you used a Gross Beat preset or two.
To be frank, the chords you were using did not always go with the Toxic Bio loop, and that was a bit of a pain to listen to. But the song keeps moving (except for the Toxic Bio part) and I listened all the way through.
Also, I didn't like whatever noise sample (wind or something) you had playing over the second half of the song. It didn't add much.
Chord progression is WEIRD
You obviously put some work into this, but I'm afraid it's.... to no good. At least from my perspective.
The production is fine, the sounds all come through pretty clear, and the VSTs you used work well with one another. But the chord progression is jarring, and weird, and frankly, a turn-off. It sounds like you couldn't tell which scale you were on, and if you're a musician and that insults you, I'm sorry, but *I* certainly couldn't tell where you were going with this.
Also I notice you used the default hat sample in FL Studio- or at least something VERY similar to it. I would recommend using a different one.
I don't know what to tell you.. I find the chords go well together? I dunno
Can you explain what you mean? I'm not a musician T_T I just started.. Maybe you could clarify what you mean and help me :)
Repetetive and harsh
I rated you a six- and those stars are because I can tell some thought went into making this 4-minute track. However, I'd say that you should focus more on melody next time- this song is lacking an appreciable tune!
If you have trouble knocking down notes to put into your song, a good place to start is a chord progression. Try listening to a few songs and seeing which ones appeal to you, or get your creative juices flowing. This will give your song a human touch, and a catchy tune for people to hum along to, and make the song much more enjoyable.
UNLESS, of course, your entire aim was to get an industrial, ambient, dirty feel, in which caseH I guess you succeeded.
thanks for advice. I really appreciate it.
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